Thursday, April 8, 2010

Sentence Fluency at Jay Middle School! - Poetry!

 What a great day we had on Tuesday:)  During meetings with teachers, I found most chose to use poetry to teach sentence fluency - a logical and powerful instructional tool given the careful crafting authors are required to use in order to create fluency and variety in this genre. 

The school is participating in a contest, Student Poetry Contest 2010,  sponsored by The America Library of Poetry.

We have decided it would be helpful to share student writing.  The kids have a great time with the poetry.  Notice as you read how well the teachers have tapped into the students' prior knowledge and personal experiences.

 


Colleen and Dianne shared formats - each one trying out a form and then debriefing.  They had great fun and so did the students.

                         If I Were in Charge of the World                               

If I Were in Charge of the World
I'ld make everything free,
Do-DO birds would be alive, 
Veggies would be extinct.

If I Were in Charge of the World
There'd be no school on Mondays,
3 hour days, 1 hour recess, 1 hour for math and 1 hour for bym,
Kids would know how to write.

If I Were in Charge of the World
You wouldn't have a mean mom,
You wouldn't have to worry about dying,
You wouldn't have to eat fist,
Or drink expired milk.

If I were in charge of the world
Moms would be nice
and my mom would have a beach house with my dad.

Bus Ride Home                           prepositional phrases
Around the corner,
Up the raod,
Past the houses,
                              By the store, 
                              Around the corner, 
                             Toward the stop sign,
                             Throughout the block,
                             Across the bridge,
                             Into the neighborhood,
                             To my house.

                            Flowers                                                             

Snowflakes fall by the ton
adding to the snowbanks one by one

About to die for winter's pass
nothing but white outside the window glass

Until new spring the colors drought
with warmer day's seedlings sprout

Spring in a bed of snow buds patiently wiat 
for the warmth of spring to open the gates

Golden pedals glimmer
 skinny stems shimmer


                   Fireworks (onomatopoeia)

Oooooo!
Different colors everywhere
Wow!
One shaped like a flower
Bang!
Really loud
Awww!
Where did they go?


                              If hope could be...

If hope could be a color
It would be white,
Like the clouds up in the sky.

If hope could be a taste
It would be sweet,
Like a fresh apple off the tree.

If hope could be a smell
It would be coconuts,
Down on the Hawaiian beach.

If hope could be a sound
It would be soft,
Like the voice of an angel.

If hope could be a feeling
It would be warmth,
Like coco on a winter day.

If hope could be an animal
It would be a sloth, 
Calm through the toughest times.

Forms to Share:)

If I Were in Charge of the World

If I were in charge of the world
I'ld______________________
_________________________
_________________________

If I were in charge of the world
There'd be________________
_________________________
_________________________

If I were in charge of the world,
You wouldn't_______________ 
You wouldn't_______________ 
You wouldn't_______________ 
Or________________________

If I were in charge of the world.



If Hope Could Be...
If hope could be a color
It would be ____________
As ______________as_______________

If hope could be a taste
It would be ____________
As ______________as_______________

If hope could be a smell
It would be ____________
As ______________as_______________

If hope could be a sound
It would be ____________
As ______________as_______________

If hope could be a feeling
It would be ____________
As ______________as_______________

If hope could be an animal
It would be ____________
As ______________as_______________



1 comment:

Nancy said...

Impressive, ladies! I enjoyed reading the students' poetry. They sound inspired!